Teacher Feedback (Rough Cut 2):

Our second rough cut was generally well received by Mrs. McCluckie in comparison to the rest our efforts, most notably our first attempt at a rough cut. The change from Jack miming in the verses to more narrative based scenes was seen as a vast improvement. This rough cut however is by no means perfect, and we know that. Scenes Miss did pick up on include;

• The shots of the two of us holding hands reveals that it is a homosexual love affair too early on, due to the hair on my arm. Therefore that needs to be re-filmed.
• The scenes whereby Jack gets up to go to the bathroom and where he is getting dressed are too long and monotonous. We planned to rectify this by breaking these shots up with a variety of cuts, featuring the party or flashbacks.

In addition there are a few shots we don't personal like and some of the editing needs tweaking, but apart from that it seems we are finally near the end of the process.